1..SETTING
PLACE:This story took place at the beach in England
TIME: Modern time in summer
2..PLOT
Jerry is a son of a widowed mother from England.During the holiday his mother decided to take him to a beach to go swim.Swiming was his hobby.His aim of going to swim was to pass through the tunnel in the sea.As he was swimming he saw some older boys who manage to pass through the tunnel and he was suprised because he can not see through the water.He started yelling to himself and get angry. He tried to overcome this by asking his mother to go buy for him swimming goggles .After that he managed to see under water and the tunnel gap and pass through it. During swimming he injured himself on the nose but he dont know how.As he saw a group of boys that was swimming near him ,he started yelling at them and wanted not to see them.He needed only to go home and lie.Her mom was worried as she saw her son pale.Eventhough he was injurred he was still happy because he manage to improve the time he spent under water.
3.MAIN CHARACTERS
The main characters are Jerry,and his mother .
Jerry: Is a young English boy of eleven years.Who was interested in swimming and visiting new places with his mother.He was also rude to his mother and whatever she wants she always experct his mother to do it that time. He is a good person because he was always wishing to sucseed in swimming.
Mother: Jerry's mother who is a widow. she loves and care for his only son alot.She is a good women who likes to visit places with her son. She is always satisfying her son needs.
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ReplyDeleteJerry did not injured himself he had a bleeding problem.
You used the word boys meaning you can not use the word was you have to use were.
Injurred-wrongly spelled
experct-wrongly spelled
Eventhough-seperate words
Jerry was the only main character in the story her mother did not play any role.