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THROUGH THE TUNNEL
Plot too short
The setting is not clear
You wrote the word friends in the middle of the sentence with a capital letter
= 7/10
THE SILK SCARF
I cant see the setting and plot because you applied some colours
You wrote Plaza with a small letter
You wrote shopkeeper as two words but it's only one word
=6/10
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Your work are definetly good. You stick to the rules and you provide what is realy needed but you started sentences with a small letter.
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Throught the tunnel
The plot is too short but the grammar is good.
=7/10
The answers about THE SILK SCARF was not published the time i m commenting.
= nothing
Friday 7 October 2011
THE SILK SCARF
1.SETTING
PLACE: The story took place at the Oriental Plaza in Johanesburg, South Africa
TIME: During apartheid
2.PLOT
The story is about a wife( Mrs Nebo) of an important official African Front Mr Clive Nebo , her friend Margaret and a shopkeeper Mr sakul. Mrs Nebo was very rich and wherever she goes she is always sorrounded by bodyguards.One day Mrs Nebo and Margaret went to the Plaza for a shopping expediction.They walked store to store looking for their goods.Mrs Nebo wanted to buy a silk scarf that match her dress but it was not available in stores where she went first .She manage to find it in Mr Sakul boutique.she wanted to buy it but she was not having enough money she decided to buy it with a cheque unfortunbately Mr Sakul didn't prefer cheques in his store.The two women start arguing about the issue of not accepting cheques and Margaret shouted to him and told the shopkeeper more about the rich Mrs Nebo, his cars, husband and the location where she live.The shopkereper was commited and fair he didn't change his law to accept cheque because of a rich woman. Mrs Nebo was offended because she thinks she didn't deserve to be treated like that. The dispute stopped when one of the shopkeeper buy the scarf and give to Mrs Nebo as a gift.
3. MAIN CHARACTERS
Mrs Nebo: A wife of an important official of the Africa Front Mr Clive Nebo. She is a medium heighted woman with heavy loins.She has a smooth skinned comprexion and she is a slight with a lovely smile and teeth.She is also rich, wear and buy expensive clothes and jewellery and drive a nice mercedez car. She is abad person who like showing off and insulting others.
Mr Sakur: A shopkeeper in Moghul Botique. He respect and adhere to his business rules which said no cheques are accepted in his business.He is fair and treat all his customer the equal.He is a good person who get others advises and motivations easily.He is commited too.
1.SETTING
PLACE: The story took place at the Oriental Plaza in Johanesburg, South Africa
TIME: During apartheid
2.PLOT
The story is about a wife( Mrs Nebo) of an important official African Front Mr Clive Nebo , her friend Margaret and a shopkeeper Mr sakul. Mrs Nebo was very rich and wherever she goes she is always sorrounded by bodyguards.One day Mrs Nebo and Margaret went to the Plaza for a shopping expediction.They walked store to store looking for their goods.Mrs Nebo wanted to buy a silk scarf that match her dress but it was not available in stores where she went first .She manage to find it in Mr Sakul boutique.she wanted to buy it but she was not having enough money she decided to buy it with a cheque unfortunbately Mr Sakul didn't prefer cheques in his store.The two women start arguing about the issue of not accepting cheques and Margaret shouted to him and told the shopkeeper more about the rich Mrs Nebo, his cars, husband and the location where she live.The shopkereper was commited and fair he didn't change his law to accept cheque because of a rich woman. Mrs Nebo was offended because she thinks she didn't deserve to be treated like that. The dispute stopped when one of the shopkeeper buy the scarf and give to Mrs Nebo as a gift.
3. MAIN CHARACTERS
Mrs Nebo: A wife of an important official of the Africa Front Mr Clive Nebo. She is a medium heighted woman with heavy loins.She has a smooth skinned comprexion and she is a slight with a lovely smile and teeth.She is also rich, wear and buy expensive clothes and jewellery and drive a nice mercedez car. She is abad person who like showing off and insulting others.
Mr Sakur: A shopkeeper in Moghul Botique. He respect and adhere to his business rules which said no cheques are accepted in his business.He is fair and treat all his customer the equal.He is a good person who get others advises and motivations easily.He is commited too.
Monday 26 September 2011
1..SETTING
PLACE:This story took place at the beach in England
TIME: Modern time in summer
2..PLOT
Jerry is a son of a widowed mother from England.During the holiday his mother decided to take him to a beach to go swim.Swiming was his hobby.His aim of going to swim was to pass through the tunnel in the sea.As he was swimming he saw some older boys who manage to pass through the tunnel and he was suprised because he can not see through the water.He started yelling to himself and get angry. He tried to overcome this by asking his mother to go buy for him swimming goggles .After that he managed to see under water and the tunnel gap and pass through it. During swimming he injured himself on the nose but he dont know how.As he saw a group of boys that was swimming near him ,he started yelling at them and wanted not to see them.He needed only to go home and lie.Her mom was worried as she saw her son pale.Eventhough he was injurred he was still happy because he manage to improve the time he spent under water.
3.MAIN CHARACTERS
The main characters are Jerry,and his mother .
Jerry: Is a young English boy of eleven years.Who was interested in swimming and visiting new places with his mother.He was also rude to his mother and whatever she wants she always experct his mother to do it that time. He is a good person because he was always wishing to sucseed in swimming.
Mother: Jerry's mother who is a widow. she loves and care for his only son alot.She is a good women who likes to visit places with her son. She is always satisfying her son needs.
PLACE:This story took place at the beach in England
TIME: Modern time in summer
2..PLOT
Jerry is a son of a widowed mother from England.During the holiday his mother decided to take him to a beach to go swim.Swiming was his hobby.His aim of going to swim was to pass through the tunnel in the sea.As he was swimming he saw some older boys who manage to pass through the tunnel and he was suprised because he can not see through the water.He started yelling to himself and get angry. He tried to overcome this by asking his mother to go buy for him swimming goggles .After that he managed to see under water and the tunnel gap and pass through it. During swimming he injured himself on the nose but he dont know how.As he saw a group of boys that was swimming near him ,he started yelling at them and wanted not to see them.He needed only to go home and lie.Her mom was worried as she saw her son pale.Eventhough he was injurred he was still happy because he manage to improve the time he spent under water.
3.MAIN CHARACTERS
The main characters are Jerry,and his mother .
Jerry: Is a young English boy of eleven years.Who was interested in swimming and visiting new places with his mother.He was also rude to his mother and whatever she wants she always experct his mother to do it that time. He is a good person because he was always wishing to sucseed in swimming.
Mother: Jerry's mother who is a widow. she loves and care for his only son alot.She is a good women who likes to visit places with her son. She is always satisfying her son needs.
Wednesday 21 September 2011
Creating a blog account is not a joke because it need consideration .At fisrt I was feared as I wasn't know how to go about it . During the creating of my blog I wanted not to get any assistance from my fellow student because I belive myself that i can it.After i filled in some details they called me to get my verrification code . At first i didn't heard them well and i was thinking that i lost the opportunity, I tried it again and I manage to get it. So this was real enjoyable.
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